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inciting incident: Ajax Moore is going out for a drive through town. Sloan and his 3rd anniversary was coming up soon so he was searching for something to get her. While staring at a little store that caught his attention; someone pulled out in front of him and he hit the other car. The cops were called and insurance information was shared. After all of it the cop pulls Ajax to the side and tells him that he thinks he recognizes him. Ajax assures him the must be mistaken and The cop, Officer Walker, insists that he knows him from somewhere else. After a few minutes Ajax finally gets away and leaves in his car. Still with no gift for Sloan.

Subplot: Ajax and Sloan's relationship becomes challenged as Ajax is off trying to fix the other issues in his life. Sloan does not understand why Ajax is going off all the time and is very distraught, she begins to assume the worse. Ajax refuses to tell her his secrets and wont tell her anything. Important dates and events go by with out Ajax's noticing. This continues to make Sloan very angry.

Having fun: You really get to know Sloan here as she goes away for a little while and stays with her family. She comes back after cooling down and Ajax has a breather from the rest of his problems. Him and Sloan spend time together and you get to know their relationship better and who they are. Simultaneously you see Officer Walkers life. This part is not as upbeat as the rest. You see his internal struggle with obsession and being alone. You really get to know why he has become the way he is.

blog 6

Ajax, a tall man with dark hair and a tattoo sprawing down his right arm, was sitting in his living room in a brown leather chair. He loves that chair, its the only piece of furniture his girlfriend didnt buy for that room. Sloan, a woman with long brown hair. Her height topped off at 5 feet, 6 inches and was as slender as a tooth pick. She was assertive and loud though for how small she was. They lived together in a small ranch somewhere in Ohio. It wasn't much, but it was home. Sloan often complained that Ajax did not focus enough on their relationship and that one day she could slip away and he would never even notice. This was a cornor stone of many arguements.

Ajax is driving just a little to far from home to find what Sloan wanted to make that night for dinner. While on his way a deer jumps infront of his car and he swerves into a car that seemed to not be that before. They crash and a cop was called. Both of them were fine. The cop finishes up with the other man and moves on to Ajax. He begins to question him the standard stuff, then moves on to tell him that he look familiar. Ajax assures him he is mistaken but the cop continues to antagoize him. Ajax, finally fed up, tells the cop that if hes done now; he needs to get home with what his girlfriend needs. He drives away.

-the cop shows up at his house the next morning asking him random questions
-he runs into the cop later at grocery store, the cop very obviously looking into his cart at what he was buying. becoming very obsessed with Ajax and his life.
-Ajax comes home to see the cop sitting on his couch talking to his girlfriend. The cop tells him he finally figured out something
-Ajax tries to contact his mother but can not find her, he goes to the prison where his father is.
-The cop becomes increasingly obsessed with him and continues to follow him and threatens to "tell on him" for what he knows.
-Sloan becomes angry with him for always running out and going somewhere


Climax.. undecided

falling action: He finds his mother and i havent really thought about how i really want it yet.

Resolution: Everything between his parents gets fixed and the cop is let off for going crazy

Blog # 5 Logline Revised

A mans past is surfacing after a car accident with the wrong person. He's sent into a tailspin while he tries to set it straight, the secrets could destroy him.

Blog #4 Logline

A mans broken past is surfacing after a car accident with the wrong person. He's sent into a tailspin while he tries to set it straight, the secrets could destroy him.

blog 8

Dialogue has to really show the characters feelings since you can't see it in writing.

The length of the dialogue dictates what kind of story it is and the feeling. Short quick dialogue would make the story intense and exciting. Longer, drawn out dialogue would make it slow and a different kind of emotional.

Talking is taking turns and just back and forth. People interrupt and cut each other off. It needs to be realistic versus back and forth as if they were all extremely polite and well mannered.