Blog 13

When we first discussed doing this project I was pretty worried that it would be too long and take too much time to do. I was also worried that I would not be able to come up with a good enough plot or characters that were life like. Now that it's done I realized it wasn't all that bad and that I actually helped come up with really life like characters and a good dialogue. I still probably wouldn't do it again though. It was a very tedious task.
Doing the outline of what I planned on doing during the script really helped me map out what I needed to write about. It put it into perspective of what needed to be written about and what the climax needed to be and so on and so forth. The things that helped me the least were the character bios and a lot of the other blogs we did on it. I knew that I would change a lot of what i previously wrote in the blogs. I thought it was a lot of extra things that I didn't really help me. Especially with the character bio's I never used that much description of the characters in the script itself. I had the character in my head and that was all I really needed, not so much all the random little things about him. During the script I added it in from what I wanted him to be and never checked the blogs.
Writing this script I didn't really learn anything about myself.
There is a total of twenty-eight pages in my final script. I didn't really manage my time well. Especially since I wasn't in class very much so my partner and I couldn't work together that much. We could have made it longer but we reached writers block a lot. We sat there for a while thinking about how we would move from one scene to the next.

I think that the greatest strength's of the script are good dialogue and a good plot. What makes me proud of the script is how it all pulls together in a sense where it feels like something that could actually happen. I'm also proud of the use of foreshadowing in some of the scenes especially with the character Sheriff Mills. It was foreshadowed well that there would be more problems with him in the future. I also like that the cashier in one scene was used to really make it obvious that something strange was going on, yet she did not know either of them. Some other good foreshadowing was with Lisa, the Store owner. Although I didn't have enough time to finish the script completely, It would turn out that Lisa was the mother of Daniel who had "died" a long time ago and was now watching her son from a distance. It was foreshadowed when she was all nervous talking to Daniel in the store. I also liked all the description used in that scene. The way we described what the store looked like and everything.
The weaknesses of the script would have to be lack of description as well as the amount of characters. I say this because i felt a slight lack of description of the settings and Daniels house. I also think the amount of characters could have been increased making the dialogue and plot longer for the script. I would improve on description of everything. Like in the scene I used in my other blog, the one in the store, i would probably write more dialogue and add in more description. I would describe what the isles are like, what kind of things he had in his cart, what Sheriff Mills was wearing, and what the cashier looked like. I would have made it longer than what it is now. I also may have added some other people in the store and have Daniel talking to them or Sheriff Mills asking a random person in the store what way he had gone. I think doing that would help make it more life like too. It seemed like there were only three people in the entire store and that wouldn't really happen.
If we had more time on this project I would do what i had explained in the previous part. I would work on my time management better and go back and fix a few things.

Blog 12

During the peer reflection my group said that the greatest strengths of this script was that it has a really interesting plot and the dialogue flowed well. They said it was a pretty original story line. I agree that the greatest strength's of this scene are good dialogue and a good plot. What makes me proud of the scene is how it all pulls together in a sense where it feels like its a situation that could actually happen. I'm also proud of the use of foreshadowing in this scene especially with the character Sheriff Mills. It was foreshadowed well that there would be more problems with him in the future. I also like that the cashier was used to really make it obvious that something strange was going on, yet she did not know either of them.
The weaknesses of this scene would have to be lack of description as well as the amount of characters. I say this because i felt a slight lack of description in the setting's of this scene. I also think the amount of characters could have been increased making the dialogue and plot longer for this scene. If i was to re-write this particular scene i would probably write more dialogue and add in more description. I would describe what the isles are like, what kind of things he had in his cart, what Sheriff Mills was wearing, and what the cashier looked like. I would have made it longer than what it is now. I also may have added some other people in the store and have Daniel talking to them or Sheriff Mills asking a random person in the store what way he had gone.
Over all I think this scene was really well written and I liked it a lot. I'm also glad that my grouped like it a lot.

bLOG 11

1. In Daniel and Jane's house.
2. Daytime
3. Jane is rambling on about something daniel does not want to do
4. Daniel is eating mike n ikes. random food in the fridge.
5. Daniels face is supposed to be getting increasingly mad, Jane just
goes on and on about stuff, daniel gets extremely sarcastic

bLOG 10

Dad
Yes, can I have a small popcorn and one of those Mike N' Ikes please?
CASHIER
Three-fifty please.
Daniel's dad pulls out a five dollar bill and gives it to the cashier.
The cashier gives him change and the snacks. Daniels jumps up and
snatches his Mike N' Ikes.
DANIEL
Thanks dad!
Dad
Anything for my first son. I love you Danny.
DANIEL
I love you too.

Blog 9

JANE
Is that all you're eating for breakfast?
DANIELYeah, actually.
JANEI don't think so. Want eggs? Do we even have any eggs? I'll make you
them however you want. You know what, I don't think we have any. Will
you go buy some?
Daniel continues sitting in his chair reading the paper and does not respond.
JANE
Dan! Will you go get some-
DANIEL
Yes, I will.
Jane looks moderately offended by Daniel cutting her off sharply. She
begins looking through the fridge.
JANE
Oh will you get some milk. I think we need light bulbs too. Some bread
would be nice, I'll make you toast. We need laundry detergent too.
I'll make you a list actually, there is no way you'll remember
everything.

blog 7

inciting incident: Ajax Moore is going out for a drive through town. Sloan and his 3rd anniversary was coming up soon so he was searching for something to get her. While staring at a little store that caught his attention; someone pulled out in front of him and he hit the other car. The cops were called and insurance information was shared. After all of it the cop pulls Ajax to the side and tells him that he thinks he recognizes him. Ajax assures him the must be mistaken and The cop, Officer Walker, insists that he knows him from somewhere else. After a few minutes Ajax finally gets away and leaves in his car. Still with no gift for Sloan.

Subplot: Ajax and Sloan's relationship becomes challenged as Ajax is off trying to fix the other issues in his life. Sloan does not understand why Ajax is going off all the time and is very distraught, she begins to assume the worse. Ajax refuses to tell her his secrets and wont tell her anything. Important dates and events go by with out Ajax's noticing. This continues to make Sloan very angry.

Having fun: You really get to know Sloan here as she goes away for a little while and stays with her family. She comes back after cooling down and Ajax has a breather from the rest of his problems. Him and Sloan spend time together and you get to know their relationship better and who they are. Simultaneously you see Officer Walkers life. This part is not as upbeat as the rest. You see his internal struggle with obsession and being alone. You really get to know why he has become the way he is.

blog 6

Ajax, a tall man with dark hair and a tattoo sprawing down his right arm, was sitting in his living room in a brown leather chair. He loves that chair, its the only piece of furniture his girlfriend didnt buy for that room. Sloan, a woman with long brown hair. Her height topped off at 5 feet, 6 inches and was as slender as a tooth pick. She was assertive and loud though for how small she was. They lived together in a small ranch somewhere in Ohio. It wasn't much, but it was home. Sloan often complained that Ajax did not focus enough on their relationship and that one day she could slip away and he would never even notice. This was a cornor stone of many arguements.

Ajax is driving just a little to far from home to find what Sloan wanted to make that night for dinner. While on his way a deer jumps infront of his car and he swerves into a car that seemed to not be that before. They crash and a cop was called. Both of them were fine. The cop finishes up with the other man and moves on to Ajax. He begins to question him the standard stuff, then moves on to tell him that he look familiar. Ajax assures him he is mistaken but the cop continues to antagoize him. Ajax, finally fed up, tells the cop that if hes done now; he needs to get home with what his girlfriend needs. He drives away.

-the cop shows up at his house the next morning asking him random questions
-he runs into the cop later at grocery store, the cop very obviously looking into his cart at what he was buying. becoming very obsessed with Ajax and his life.
-Ajax comes home to see the cop sitting on his couch talking to his girlfriend. The cop tells him he finally figured out something
-Ajax tries to contact his mother but can not find her, he goes to the prison where his father is.
-The cop becomes increasingly obsessed with him and continues to follow him and threatens to "tell on him" for what he knows.
-Sloan becomes angry with him for always running out and going somewhere


Climax.. undecided

falling action: He finds his mother and i havent really thought about how i really want it yet.

Resolution: Everything between his parents gets fixed and the cop is let off for going crazy